Underneath the homeless
At one point in our lives we have seen, heard or even had some type of contact with a homeless person. yet we as humans have grown very ignorant towards these very unfortunate people we call homeless. we must understand that they are human beings just like us. The fact that we are fortunate enough to have a home and food on our table cannot give us any right to judge others just because theyre not as lucky as we are. we must remember that homeless people are a father, brother, cousin and friend of someone just like you. perhaps one of our own family members can be out there laying on the streets without any food or shelter. Im sure that if you see one of your own you will help but what about the rest of the homeless. What is underneath the other homeless?
-this would work as a good intro section
time after time we have seen them and judge them based on the assumption that they must be drug addicts, or thieves etc. Why? Why cant we help them? Why is it that when we see a stray animal our hearts melt whith sorrow and grief but yet for our own we feel nothing.
-here you begin to touch on the idea of negative stereotypes and representations of the homeless
-develop this further and spend some time breaking this down for your reader. Where do these stereotypes come from, how do they stick around, why & how do they affect us. etc.
Reality is that if we can see farther and deeper that our eyes can see, we might just find out the real story behind our brothers and cousins and friends that happen to be lost out there. so close but yet so far, close enough to hear them but yet unable to listen. (I'm merging these sections together because this sentence works as strong topic sentence to your example of John) previously i had the opportunity to interiew a homeless veteran. He is not homeless because he is a thive or a drug addict. he is homeless because the postdramatic stress of war. Here we arel iving the american dream made possible by a homeless man called john.
-consider developing and adding more to John's story if you plan on using him as an example of someone who challenges negative stereotypes
-you are going to want your readers to be moved by John the way you were if he is to serve as support for your focus/position which seems to be how negative stereotypes of the homeless affect the way we feel and interact with them
-I can see a section being added to this that looks into specific resources that are available for the homeless or go the other way and discuss what isn't available or working
-I can also see a section detailing someone else's story that isn't a veteran to show more examples of people who are out there that challenge the negative representations of the homeless we are used to
Out there on the streets many of these heroes rest there tired feet and souls on the riverbeds, alleys and freeways. while we lay in a comfortable bed under a warm blanket and a rood over our heads, so next time it rains or next time its freezing cold
-this would work as a good intro section
time after time we have seen them and judge them based on the assumption that they must be drug addicts, or thieves etc. Why? Why cant we help them? Why is it that when we see a stray animal our hearts melt whith sorrow and grief but yet for our own we feel nothing.
-here you begin to touch on the idea of negative stereotypes and representations of the homeless
-develop this further and spend some time breaking this down for your reader. Where do these stereotypes come from, how do they stick around, why & how do they affect us. etc.
Reality is that if we can see farther and deeper that our eyes can see, we might just find out the real story behind our brothers and cousins and friends that happen to be lost out there. so close but yet so far, close enough to hear them but yet unable to listen. (I'm merging these sections together because this sentence works as strong topic sentence to your example of John) previously i had the opportunity to interiew a homeless veteran. He is not homeless because he is a thive or a drug addict. he is homeless because the postdramatic stress of war. Here we arel iving the american dream made possible by a homeless man called john.
-consider developing and adding more to John's story if you plan on using him as an example of someone who challenges negative stereotypes
-you are going to want your readers to be moved by John the way you were if he is to serve as support for your focus/position which seems to be how negative stereotypes of the homeless affect the way we feel and interact with them
-I can see a section being added to this that looks into specific resources that are available for the homeless or go the other way and discuss what isn't available or working
-I can also see a section detailing someone else's story that isn't a veteran to show more examples of people who are out there that challenge the negative representations of the homeless we are used to
Out there on the streets many of these heroes rest there tired feet and souls on the riverbeds, alleys and freeways. while we lay in a comfortable bed under a warm blanket and a rood over our heads, so next time it rains or next time its freezing cold
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